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Mamie White's avatar

I regularly share with my husband the prompt for the week, it looks like it might become a joint effort or I just steal his ideas. with permission of course. Belonging to poetry pals has increased my joy this year in writing poetry, in hearing poetry, in talking about poetry with you guys and my husband who is enjoying my joy. i love this community and how its making a better poet and also a my joyful and therefore more me and that leads me to being a better human.

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Nelly Bryce's avatar

Mamie I feel the same. I love that you are writing with your husband. I am so grateful for you being here. And you use the word “belonging”. This means a lot ❤️

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Macy Hudgins's avatar

I have actually written with alliteration before. It was one of those 3 AM word vomit trying to shut my mind up so I could get some sleep poems. I was half delirious and still don’t entirely believe in the quality of the product, but it feels much to sacred to edit. It’s almost like a landmark.

Because of my experience, I second your belief about alliteration. It is exciting to write this way, because it is like rhyming, only at the beginning of the word instead of the end. Such soundplay opens the door for even the most unrhythmic free verse to dance on the tongue. Truly, alliteration is not appreciated enough.

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Tamsin's avatar

Oo, alliteration and anaphora all in one. I often use alliteration I think. Both poems are lovely.

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A. Wilder Westgate's avatar

I love this poem. There's so much visceral imagery along with the alliteration. I think it really works to reinforce that these were flesh and blood people.

I think I have also sometimes over-used alliteration. I really love it as a poetic device.

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Lisa O'Hare's avatar

I am also drawn massively to musicality and rhythm of putting words together… so I love this poem and prompt.

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Vic's avatar

Love this Nelly, and love alliteration. I’ll try to get back on the poetry train and have a go x

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LeeAnn Pickrell's avatar

I love alliteration too and use it as well. It can be quite powerful, I think.

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Margaret Ann Silver's avatar

Oh, the poem is so gorgeous. I thought it ended after the first image and I was still blown away. Then I saw that it continued and continued to love it :).

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Martin Hughes's avatar

"Can it be too much?"

No, not necessarily, Nelly. I like a lovely little lot of alliteration.

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Nelly Bryce's avatar

🤣 🤣 we are kindred spirits Martin

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Nelly Bryce's avatar

Oh that’s interesting. And my own white bias meaning I didn’t know/notice that so thank you. And those books sound great too. Ooh yes. A counter poem 👏

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Jessica's avatar

Yes, I’m just reading ‘Against White Feminism’ & Susan B. Anthony was racist - very against helping Black men get a vote before (white) women.

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A. Wilder Westgate's avatar

Thank you for sharing those titles! Going to look them up right now.

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